«@BiggsTrek and Chrisproductions.. thanks for the advices, 'll more consider about the narations and want to practice how to make movie with the avatars speach each others.

may i give u some cordova coffee as a gift..? if so.. please come to my country.. Indonesia..!

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«I agree with the Biz on the narration.
explain things visually more then narration that's what makes it a motion picture or movie.
Great job for your first machinima and good luck with your coffee business.»

«So that was a coffee commercial? lol, it all makes sense now!

I thought the narration was a bit too much. It was necessary, I know, but could have avoided stating the obvious (things we can see don't need to be told to us, if you know what I mean).

For a first effort, it was outstanding (certainly better than my first!)

Now I need some coffee... some Cordova!

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«thanks for the tips guys..!
this is my first machinima i ever made..
thats coffee is mine.. i sell that coffee in my real life..
I will use that movie to promote my coffee.. i play that video at my coffee stand booth in every exibitions..
thanks to machinima.. now i can build my hobby in video movies and i can reduce the cost in my coffee promotion budget..! »

«Very nice.
As thebiz said I woulda enjoyed more closeups on the fighting scenes.
Visually stunning, and again I too wonder if this is an actual commercial.
Welcome to the U.»

«Bizzare coffee commercial. I liked the action animations in second life (the first sword fighting sequences I remember seeing). Particularly enjoyed the closeup shots from below when the hero would jump in the air. MAde me think a few more closeups would have been effective in the fight sequences. The English VO could have been a little louder and a bit more clear. Curious as to wether this is indeed a commercial ad. »