«For your very first tm movie very well done!
For the next movies take care of the music. It mostly doesn´t fit to the pics.
Further you need more dialogue. More than half of the film is dialogue. If it is just subtitle, it is ok. But put it in.
You should cut faster - some scenes last too long - and need to construct characters. F.e.: They want to get out, cry that there is the police, cry to each other to get their weapons and fight outside the car - CUT - police cries to them to give up, or they will open fire and so on. Just a very, very simple example.
For sure you should be more creative - but this is the way.
For sure no finished Machinima and you won´t understand what they are talking - but take care of cuts, music and so on. I used a game soundtrack and so had for every "emotion" the right background music.
Every good movie has a good music and interesting characters, that are nearly totally made by dialogue!»
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Description: Clown pyromaniacs have their hearts set on destroying a section of a bustling city. Five SWAT men have other plans, but the results will be violent.