«I also enjoyed this short a great deal. I see a lot of beautiful and fitting props and scenes, too. And I'm impressed that you tried to keep it authentic sounding by using Japanese voices and subtitles.
However, while I do not speak Japanese, I was disappointed in your MIS-use of "Samurai". A Samurai was part of the middle to upper echelons of the military class who served the nobility and closely followed Bushidō, a moral code of conduct. Basically, they were the Japanese equivalent to a Knight in Medieval Europe, serving their King or Lord and bound to a code of Chivalry. Similarly, a Rōnin is a Samurai who no longer has a Lord or master to serve.
Although interpretations of Bushidō vary, there were certain tenets that were widely practiced. Among these were honor and bravery. Further, if a Samurai failed to uphold their honor and fell into disgrace, the only way to redeem oneself was by seppuku (ritual suicide).
My POINT is that those men in black Shinobi shōzoku, sent as assassins by the Daimyo, do not seem to fit the role of Samurai. They had strict rules about honor and combat. It would be considered dishonorable by most for a Samurai to use stealth, to dress like that and fight with throwing stars, let alone behave like a true assassin.
Instead, those men fit the role of NINJA perfectly. That is, covert agents or mercenaries who specialize in stealth and assassination. Similarly, the woman who narrates and is after revenge, could NOT be consider Samurai or even Rōnin. So I'd say it's much more appropriate to call this a Ninja story.»
«tigereyes - **** - First of all, you had a very dramatic opening, quiet and calm - the music really drew me in and crafted the environment of the film. There was a feeling to your film, to your world, that never went away. Excellent music.
The story was light, the film was short. I would do a lot more "show, don't tell" kind of story telling:
"a day so peaceful, so happy"
That can be shown, it doesn't need to be said. True storytelling is the art of showing beyond telling. Dialog is powerful at the right moment, but actions will always speak louder than words. Show relationships, don't let us know immediately.
3:31 that was an interesting fight scene
The action of the film was well done, the camera moves a bit too much at times for my taste but that is a stylistic choice. Slow motion used too often feels like 300 - not your own film with your own kind of cinematic explorations.
«What a fine piece of storytelling. Your use of lighting, sets, backdrops etc.. is amazing.
The music worked very well, the voices.. some better than others.
I might have cast real actors and done it in english but hey, you can still so that if you like.
This was incredible!»
«This was a nifty samurai tale with some authentic music!
I like your use of scenes and their gradual transitions. The use of flashbacks was highly effective and coupled with some fine angles, you made this intruiging viewing from start to finish. Although the Vo's weren't as established as you would have liked, I appreciate your added value of subtitles. Using outside conversations showed good improvisation and although it wasn't consistent, it added another layer of authenticity to your film.
The battles were fast, smooth and intense and all in all, I very much enjoyed this and look forward to seeing more of your work with this tool.
Until the next time...
Nuke Well for the Samurai!»
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